slushed snow melts slowly.
the cold lurks around for months.
winter stands still far too long.
frosty cars pass by.
everyone hurrys along.
the cold bites them all.
Both of these haikus go together. I feel that the pretty part of snow goes away so fast and that the slushy, brown part stays longer than anything. It is cold for months on end whereas summer never seems long enough. Also, the cars that go by, especially early in the morning are usually frosty. Everyone moves quickly because they subconciously think they can escape the winter cold, however, they cannot avoid it. Whether it be form your house to your car or your car to your job/school/store you will get some of the winter cold no matter what.
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I like how this haiku (as in the last one), shows the wicked nature of the winter months. The personification of the cold in the second poem does a good job of adding to the vicious persona of the "cold". Words like "slowly" and "lurks" in the first haiku add to the dragging feeling that winter has. Good job!
ReplyDeleteI could definitely relate to being one of these people in the poem. Always trying to get out of the cold. I enjoyed the image this poem portrayed to me. :)
ReplyDeleteI liked your poems , ecspecially the first one because you used a different word (lurke). I also liked it because the winter does stay too long, it would be nice if it was warmer.
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